The Fiction Audience Identification Workbook

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A Working Guide to Discovering Who Your Novel Is Really Written For

This is a drafting tool, not a marketing document. It works best between the halfway point of a first draft and the beginning of a second, when enough of the book exists to have opinions about and not so much that changing course means starting over.

Complete it in one sitting if you can. The first answer is usually the honest one, and the value of the exercise comes from the friction between sections rather than from any single page. Where two sections contradict each other, that contradiction is the finding.

Work in pencil. Return to Sections 3, 7, and 9 after every major revision.

Estimated completion time: 90 minutes for the first pass; 30 minutes for each revisit.

Section 1 — Your Story at a Glance

Write these before consulting your outline. What you can recall unprompted is what the book is actually about.

One-sentence premise (protagonist, want, obstacle, cost):

Three-sentence synopsis (setup, turn, stakes — no proper nouns beyond two):

Field	Answer
Primary genre
Secondary genre
Estimated final word count
Intended audience age range
Series or standalone
Point of view and tense

Check: Does your one-sentence premise imply the genre you named? If a reader could hear it and guess wrong, note why here:

Section 2 — Your Reader’s Emotional Journey

Complete each prompt with a feeling, not a plot event.

When my reader opens this book, they hope to feel …
By the end of chapter one, they should feel …
By chapter three, they should feel …
At the midpoint, they should feel …
During the climax, they should feel …
On the final page, they should feel …
One week later, what they remember feeling is …

Reflection: Read the seven answers in sequence, ignoring the manuscript. Do they describe one continuous experience or two adjacent ones? Where does the line break?

Section 3 — Emotional Promise Audit

Rate the current draft from 1 to 5 on delivery, not intention. A 5 means a stranger would name this as a defining quality of the book.

Promise	Score (1–5)	Scene that proves it
Wonder
Suspense
Comfort
Hope
Romance
Mystery
Humor
Adventure
Fear
Justice
Catharsis
Intellectual challenge
Belonging
Courage

Your top three, ranked:

(Primary — this one governs the ending.)

Diagnostic: If you could not name a proving scene for your primary promise, the promise lives in your intentions rather than in the draft. Note the chapter where it should appear:

Second diagnostic: If more than five categories scored a 4 or 5, the book may be attempting too many contracts at once. Which two are you willing to demote?

Section 4 — Comparable Titles

Complete at least five rows. Favor titles published in the last five to seven years. At least one entry should be honest about what makes your book unusual rather than what makes it respectable.

Comparable title	Author	Shared readership	Shared emotional promise	Where your book departs

The comp sentence. Write the recommendation a bookseller would give, using two of the above:

“If you liked ______ and ______, this is ______.”

Check: Would a reader who loved both comps recognize your book within three chapters? If not, one of the comps is aspirational rather than accurate. Mark it.

Section 5 — Reader Persona

Invent one reader with enough specificity to be inconvenient.

Field	Answer
First name
Age range
Occupation or life stage
Favorite genres
Three favorite authors
Reading frequency
Preferred format
Where and when they read
Last book that kept them up late
What that book did to earn it
Why they picked up your novel
What they would tell a friend
What would make them stop at page thirty

Finish the sentence:

“If this reader described my novel in one line, they would say …”

And the harder one:

“The thing this reader will forgive is ______. The thing they will not forgive is ______.”

Section 6 — Genre Expectation Checklist

Expectations I am fulfilling on purpose. Write five specifically enough to be checked by someone else. (“Satisfying ending” fails this test; “the mystery is solved using clues given to the reader before chapter twenty” passes.)

Expectations I am breaking on purpose. For each, answer the follow-up.

Expectation broken	How a reader knows it was intentional	Chapter where the signal appears

Warning check: If any “how a reader knows” column references your notes, outline, or a planned sequel rather than the text itself, the signal is not in the book yet.

Section 7 — Audience Drift Assessment

Complete per act. Use the traffic-light system: Green = consistent, Yellow = needs review, Red = significant drift.

Axis	Act I	Act II	Act III	Notes
Tone
Pacing
Language register
Nature of central conflict
Violence and intimacy threshold
Humor style and frequency
Emotional payoff type
Thematic emphasis

Compressed reading exercise. Read only your act openings and act closings in sequence, skipping everything between. Record what you notice:

Three-chapter test. Give one chapter from each act to three readers who have not seen the rest. Ask each to name the genre and intended reader.

Reader	Chapter given	Genre named	Audience named

Convergent answers mean the book is holding. Divergent answers locate the fracture. Note the fracture point:

Section 8 — Beta Reader Alignment

Recruit for match, not for kindness. A reader who never touches your genre cannot tell you whether the conventions land; a reader who reads nothing else cannot tell you whether the book opens a door to anyone outside it. Include at least one of each.

Reader	Genre familiarity	Matches persona?	Biggest takeaway	Favorite scene	Confusing scene	Would recommend?

The recommendation test. Record each reader’s one-sentence description verbatim. Do not paraphrase and do not correct them.

Variance analysis: Where the five sentences disagree is your positioning problem, stated in data. What do they disagree about?

The deleted scene test. Remove your three favorite scenes from one reader’s copy. Note whether the absence was flagged:

Scene removed	Noticed?	What that tells you

Section 9 — Craft Consequences

Audience decisions become craft decisions here. Fill this in after Sections 3 and 5 are complete.

Decision	Your answer	Justified by which reader trait
Average chapter length
Chapter endings: closed door or open window
Sentence register: lean, layered, or mixed
How much the narrator explains
On-page violence threshold
Intimacy threshold
Profanity threshold
Humor style
Ending shape: resolved, open, or costly

Consistency check: Does any answer above contradict a scene you have already written? List the offending chapters:

Section 10 — Developmental Editor Preparation

☐ I can state my audience in one sentence without using the word “everyone.”
☐ My genre is defined by my dominant emotional promise, not my content list.
☐ My emotional promise is consistent across all three acts.
☐ My comparable titles are accurate rather than aspirational.
☐ At least three beta readers match my reader persona.
☐ At least one beta reader does not, deliberately.
☐ My opening chapter attracts the reader my ending is written for.
☐ My ending fulfils the promise made in the first three chapters.
☐ I know which scenes define my audience and which are negotiable structure.
☐ I know which expectations I am breaking and where the signal appears.

Final Reflection

Complete in full sentences. These become the raw material for your query letter, your back cover copy, and your first conversation with an editor.

My ideal reader is …
They will finish my novel feeling …
The strongest evidence that my book fits its audience is …
The clearest sign of audience drift in the current draft is …
The scene I am most afraid to cut, and why …
Before publication I still need to …

Appendix A — Worked Example

A completed fragment, for reference. Use it as a calibration tool for specificity, not as a template to imitate.

Premise: A retired naval cartographer is hired to map a coastline that has been redrawn three times in a decade, and discovers the surveys are being falsified to hide what the tide is uncovering.

Primary emotional promise: Intellectual challenge. Secondary: Wonder, then justice.

Comps: Two contemporary literary mysteries with maritime settings, plus one older adventure novel that accounts for the book’s appetite for technical detail.

Persona — “Margaret,” 58, librarian, reads nightly in print, annotates: Picked up the novel for the cover and the first paragraph. Will forgive a slow first hundred pages. Will not forgive a solution she could not have reached herself. Would stop at page thirty if the cartography turned out to be decoration.

Craft consequence: Chapters run long and end on open questions rather than cliffhangers. The narrator explains almost nothing twice. Violence stays off the page; the threat is institutional.

Drift finding: Act III scored Yellow on tone — the antagonist became a conspiracy rather than a bureaucracy, which raises stakes but abandons the promise that made Margaret start the book.

Appendix B — Quick Reference: Common Drift Patterns

Pattern	Early symptom	Usual cause
Comedy into grief	Jokes thin out after the midpoint	Author grew more serious than the premise
Cozy into graphic	A single explicit scene raising stakes	Sagging middle solved with shock
Literary into action	Prose register drops in act two	Plot pressure applied late
Worldbuilding abandoned	Descriptions shorten sharply	Quest structure crowding out setting
Romance into tragedy	Relationship stops developing	Theme overriding contract
Standalone into series bait	Unresolved threads multiply in act three	Sequel planning leaking into the draft

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Dialogue Under Pressure: A Practical Revision Workbook

A hands-on companion to the blog post of the same name | Ford Mountain Publishing, LLC

This workbook doesn’t recapitulate theory. It puts the tools in your hands.

Each section targets a specific structural failure. Come to each one with a scene from your current manuscript — or use the sample prompts provided. Work through them in order the first time. After that, drop into whatever section matches where you’re stuck.

One rule before you begin: Don’t polish lines until you’ve worked through Sections 1–3. Word-level revision is the last step, not the first.

Section 1 — Scene Pressure Audit

Most flat dialogue starts here: the scene has no structural pressure. Before you touch a single line, you have to diagnose the architecture underneath it.

The Test: If the characters spoke nothing but complete, honest truths to each other — would anything in the scene actually change? If the answer is no, the scene isn’t built yet.

Choose a scene from your current manuscript. Fill in:

Character A wants from Character B in this specific scene: (Not their arc goal. Not their thematic purpose. What do they want from this person, right now?)

Character B wants from Character A:

What happens if the truth is fully spoken in this scene?

What does each character most need to avoid revealing — and why?

Diagnostic Verdict

If your answers were…	Then you need to…
Vague or interchangeable (“to connect,” “to understand”)	Rebuild the scene’s specific stakes before writing any dialogue
Identical for both characters	Give each character a competing want — collision is the structure
“Nothing changes if the truth is spoken”	Add cost to honesty: social, emotional, or informational

Section 2 — Power Tracking

Dialogue is a power struggle. That doesn’t mean your characters need to be hostile — it means every exchange shifts something. Who knows more? Who needs more? Who is performing, and who is watching the performance?

Take the same scene from Section 1. Read through it and answer:

Who controls the conversation at the opening? (Who sets the terms, the topic, the tone?)

Where does control shift — and what causes the shift? (A revelation, a deflection, a silence, a piece of information suddenly shared or withheld?)

Who holds power at the scene’s end? Same person or different?

What did the losing character lose? What did the gaining character win?

If no shift occurred: The scene is exposition wearing a costume. Return to Section 1 and identify what each character is protecting — then let that thing be threatened.

Power Shift Checklist

☐ The power dynamic is different at the scene’s end than at its beginning
☐ I can identify the specific line or beat where control shifted
☐ The character who loses power is changed by that loss — not just inconvenienced
☐ Something has been revealed, decided, or discovered that cannot be taken back

Section 3 — Before / After: Controlled Rewrite

This section trains one skill: getting emotion off the page and into the architecture of the scene. When characters name what they feel, the reader has nothing left to discover. Discovery is what keeps people reading.

The Rule: No emotion labels. No direct confessions. The feeling must be present — but it can only exist in behavior, in what is avoided, in what is said instead of the real thing.

Prompt 1

“I was scared you wouldn’t come back.”

Rewrite this line — or the exchange that contains it — without any emotion words, without any direct confession of feeling. The fear must be present. It cannot be named.

Your rewrite:

Prompt 2 — From Your Own Manuscript

Find a line in your current project where a character states an emotion directly. Write it here, then rewrite it below.

Original line:

Rewrite (no emotion labels, no direct confession):

Ask yourself after each rewrite:

Is the emotional truth still present — just not stated?
What does the character do instead of confessing?
What does the other character hear — which may not be what was intended?

Section 4 — Resistance Injection Drill

Resistance is the engine under subtext. When characters answer directly, honestly, and completely — the scene has nowhere to go. This drill builds the habit of indirect response.

The Drill: Write 6–10 lines of dialogue between two characters. At least 3 responses must avoid answering directly. One character must change the topic under pressure.

Use this scenario, or substitute one from your manuscript:

One character has come back after a long absence. The other has been waiting. Neither of them will say what they actually need.

Your dialogue (6–10 lines):

After writing, go back and mark:

Circle each line where the responding character deflects rather than answers
Underline the line where the topic changes — note what caused the change
Put a star next to the line that carries the most weight without saying the most
Identify: what does each character want that they never ask for directly?

Section 5 — Genre Transformation Drill

The same line carries completely different pressure depending on genre context. This drill develops your ability to load a simple line with the expectations, costs, and power dynamics specific to each form.

Base line: “You shouldn’t be here.”

Rewrite this line — and the one response that follows — in each genre below. Change as much as needed, but preserve the core meaning: presence is forbidden; the speaker has the authority to forbid it.

Romance Version Think: forbidden presence, desire that can’t be named, something to lose.

Thriller Version Think: surveillance, danger, what gets said in a room where the walls have ears.

Fantasy Version Think: power, law, consequence — what does it mean to be where you are not permitted?

Reflection: What changed between versions? What did you add — specificity, consequence, physical detail — to make the line carry weight in its new context? That added element is what your original scene may be missing.

Section 6 — Compression Exercise

Most dialogue scenes are too long — not because the writer said too much, but because not enough of what was said is load-bearing. This exercise identifies which lines are structural and which are filler masquerading as texture.

The Exercise: Take a dialogue scene of at least 10 lines. Remove 30% of lines. Then remove another 20%. Each time, preserve only the lines that carry tension. If removing a line doesn’t hurt — that line was not working.

Step 1 — First Pass (remove 30%): Mark or cross out lines that don’t shift power, reveal information, or cost the speaker something.

(Work on a printed copy, a separate document, or in the margin of your draft.)

Step 2 — Second Pass (remove another 20%): Of what remains — which lines could be implied by what surrounds them?

After compressing, ask:

Does the scene still make sense? (If not, a structural element is missing — restore the function, not the filler)
Is the tension higher or lower after compression?
What do the removed lines tell you about what the scene was actually doing?

Section 7 — Consequence Test

If a line can be cut without changing what happens next — it is not doing structural work.

The Test: For each line of dialogue in your scene, ask: What changes — in the scene, in the relationship, in what each character knows — because this line was spoken? If the answer is “nothing,” cut or rewrite.

Line of Dialogue	What changes because this was said?

Note: A line doesn’t have to cause a dramatic event to carry consequence. It can shift tone, reveal a secret through what it avoids, or change what one character now knows about the other. Small shifts are still shifts.

Section 8 — Read-Aloud Audit

This is the final pass — and the only one that works at the sentence level. Read your revised scene aloud. Your ear will catch what your eye misses.

Mark, don’t rewrite — yet. Flag the problems first. Then return to each one with the section’s questions before revising.

1. Unnatural Rhythm

Lines that catch in your mouth when spoken aloud. Constructions no one would use in speech. Sentences that feel written, not said.

Where did you stumble or pause unnaturally?
Which lines required re-reading to understand?

Lines flagged for rhythm:

2. Identical Voice Patterns

Both characters sound like the same person. Same sentence length, same register, same vocabulary. If you removed the dialogue tags — would you know who was speaking?

Which exchanges could belong to either character?
Where does one character’s vocabulary bleed into the other’s?

Lines flagged for voice:

3. Emotional Flatness

Lines that are delivered, not felt. The words are technically correct but nothing is at stake in them.

Which lines could be said by a robot?
Where is the character speaking rather than fighting, hiding, or calculating?

Lines flagged for flatness:

Revise only the flagged lines. Untouched lines are working. Leave them alone. The goal is surgical — in and out — not a full rewrite.

A Final Note

Dialogue revision is really scene revision. The line-level polish matters — but it is the last thing, not the first. If you have worked through this workbook from Section 1 forward, you have already done the harder and more important work.

What you want is a scene where something is at stake, someone is resisting something, and the cost of speaking — or not speaking — is real. When those conditions exist, the dialogue finds its own tension. Your job becomes restraint, not invention.

“Subtext only works when something is being actively avoided.” Build the avoidance into the architecture. The rest follows.

This workbook is a free companion resource from Ford Mountain Publishing, LLC. If your scenes — or your dialogue — need deep structural work, our developmental editing and manuscript assessment services are designed for exactly this kind of work. Learn more at fordmountainpublishing.com/services.